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I Want You by *Pola-444:iconPola-444:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


I want to scream your name,
as loud as I can.
I want you here beside me,
right now and forever.
I want to whisper your name,
with my breath tickling your ear.

I want you in my bed,
to keep me warm during the lonely nights.
I want you in the day,
so I can see you shinning light.
I want you at night,
to keep the darkness at bay.

I want you to hold me,
safely in your arms.
I want you to kiss me,
with such tenderness on my lips.
I want you to hold my hand,
to prove that you are mine.
I want you to say “I love you”
to prove that my fears are not true.

I just want you.
©2007-2009 *Pola-444
:iconpola-444:

Author's Comments

based on some truth, but not really. More on feelings that I have. which would be truth? idk, some sappy poetry that i can't help but writing. don't you love it? i know i do :D
oh i know some parts are messed up, i just can't figure out what to do with it. uh.. started out with just "I want to scream your name, as loud as i can. I want you here beside me, right now and forever" but it didn't sound complete. so uh yeah, added more.. please tell me what you think..
ENJOY

Thanks for all the views.

I just want to say this is for one of the guys that meant a lot to me, and still does.

Comments


love 5 5 joy 3 3 wow 2 2 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
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~vampireprincess21 Jul 20, 2007, 11:25:15 PM
this is awesome.....=D

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TRUE romance is dead BECAUSE i shot it in the chest then in the head
:iconpola-444:
*Pola-444 Jul 20, 2007, 11:26:12 PM
thank you so much :D i am overly glad that you enjoyed it

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I love fully and completely, even though I know I may get hurt. It's how I live.
=TimetravelerJoe made my lovely avatar!
#QuillCafe , a chat for writers :heart:
Clubs: =RawEm0tion =sunsets *GLBT-Pride-Club
:iconevildeadness:
~EvilDeadness Jul 21, 2007, 4:03:19 AM
I like it...

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...it made me feel horrible, like a train had hit me, and the train was angry, and then it called my mother to tell her I was a bad son.
-Pictures For Sad Children
:iconwilwar77:
~wilwar77 Jul 21, 2007, 6:28:55 AM
WOW your love comes out in this one ;YOUR good yeper
:iconsakuramustdie:
~sakuramustDIE Jul 21, 2007, 11:29:17 AM
when true emotion is put into something it shows...

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"YOU'RE PLAYING WITH THE HEARTS OF 3 MEN AND A DOG. YOU REALLY ARE YOUTHFUL."~Gai sensai

stop bothering me about my screenname, i was young...and foolish...also that's a stump in my avatar. sasuke + stump = hawt
:iconalucardsbloodlust:
~Alucardsbloodlust Jul 21, 2007, 11:44:46 AM
me likey this. its sorta fill of emotion but then it contradicts wit the "I want you in my bed,
to keep me warm during the lonely nights" which is a good contrast as it show complexity =)

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Labour Without Joy is Base. Labour Without Sorrow Is Base. Sorrow Without Labour is base. Joy Without Labour Is base.- John Ruskin.
"Memories a poor thing to have. its your own real hair and eyes and hands and mouth i want."-Philip Pullman
:iconalucardsbloodlust:
~Alucardsbloodlust Jul 21, 2007, 11:45:08 AM
is complexity a word

--
Labour Without Joy is Base. Labour Without Sorrow Is Base. Sorrow Without Labour is base. Joy Without Labour Is base.- John Ruskin.
"Memories a poor thing to have. its your own real hair and eyes and hands and mouth i want."-Philip Pullman
:iconaurellius:
~Aurellius Jul 21, 2007, 11:52:17 AM
wow, one of the best ones ive read here
awesome
:iconjacquelinekaychan:
~jacquelinekaychan Jul 21, 2007, 12:48:47 PM
Hehe = D finally a slightly perverted poem from you! I thought that would take an act of congress to get!

He does seem like the type you could do that with, definitly!

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Would your maker have opened your eyes if
he'd preferred them closed?
:iconpola-444:
*Pola-444 Jul 21, 2007, 12:53:38 PM
"i like it.. " is that all you can say? u don't sound too happy.. but uh thanks soo much anyways :D

--
I love fully and completely, even though I know I may get hurt. It's how I live.
=TimetravelerJoe made my lovely avatar!
#QuillCafe , a chat for writers :heart:
Clubs: =RawEm0tion =sunsets *GLBT-Pride-Club
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